Wednesday, February 8, 2012

A cold day at the Beach ..

Unexpectedly the great wind blew me away roughly. My teeth chattered. It was a blue day and my body felt numb. Shivering and freezing, I grabbed my beach bag and pulled out my blanket as fast as I could. I wrapped it around me. It was quivering and I just couldn’t take it anymore.

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  1. Hello Sylvia
    Ummm...Will it has been an expect for you story about going to the beach with your family during the holidays. I think that it has been nice going to the beach will I was reading your story it was abit commenting I didn't have anything to say but know and then it seem to be interesting

    By for know Jessica P

  2. Hi Sylvia

    I liked reading your beach story especially some of the words you used. There's some mistakes in your story maybe you could check it out and fix it up, but anyway keep the good work up!

    Yours Sincerely Jarna

  3. Hi Sylvia

    Your story sounds cool, I like how you used good vocabulary and how you described you were cold without even using the word cold. My favourite line is, It was quivering and I just couldn’t take it anymore. Though you could have made it better without using the word cold in your title, anyway you did a good job!

    From Seini-Mino


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